tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33195286242749586.post9107353410092968340..comments2023-10-28T06:28:55.088-04:00Comments on Gail Faulkner News: One more time with the Query, pleaseUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33195286242749586.post-55708952272152927382008-02-26T20:07:00.000-05:002008-02-26T20:07:00.000-05:00OOPS! Sorry -- it's late and I haven't eaten dinne...OOPS! Sorry -- it's late and I haven't eaten dinner. *lol* Gifted, Gentle -- They both start with G right? <BR/><BR/><BR/>Annzinreadshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13128034130303887939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33195286242749586.post-730744425660561102008-02-26T20:05:00.000-05:002008-02-26T20:05:00.000-05:00I like the revised version. It's short, but manage...I like the revised version. It's short, but manages to give a fairly complete description of the story -- in my so-not-a-professional editor-or-agent opinion. *lol* <BR/><BR/>But speaking as someone who wrote countless papers throughout school, the only item I can offer as an opportunity for improvement is where it says "Gentle telepath and the Warrior King.." it either needs a second "the" (before gentle telepath) <I><B> or</I></B> lose "the" before Warrior King -- personally, I would vote for deleting THE before Warrior King, but you should try it both ways and see which you prefer. <BR/><BR/><BR/>Annzinreadshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13128034130303887939noreply@blogger.com