Erotic romance with an edge.
I like the revised version. It's short, but manages to give a fairly complete description of the story -- in my so-not-a-professional editor-or-agent opinion. *lol* But speaking as someone who wrote countless papers throughout school, the only item I can offer as an opportunity for improvement is where it says "Gentle telepath and the Warrior King.." it either needs a second "the" (before gentle telepath) or lose "the" before Warrior King -- personally, I would vote for deleting THE before Warrior King, but you should try it both ways and see which you prefer. Ann
OOPS! Sorry -- it's late and I haven't eaten dinner. *lol* Gifted, Gentle -- They both start with G right? Ann
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